Page references use the printed page numbers in the PDF.
| Page | Issue | Suggested correction |
|---|---|---|
| Cover | “Written By” uses inconsistent title capitalization. | Written by |
| 4 | Comma splice: “fill your belly, it is…” | “fill your belly; it is…” |
| 6 | “You must carefully balanced…” | “You must carefully balance…” |
| 8 | “Fish Lure: :” has duplicate punctuation. | Fish Lure: |
| 8 | “By realistic imitation of a frantic baitfish…” is awkward. | “Through realistically imitating a frantic baitfish…” |
| 10 | “crime of Theft” capitalizes a common noun inconsistently. | “crime of theft” |
| 10 | “settlement charter” is missing a likely article. | “granted by the settlement charter” |
| 14–15 | “leave the water better than when you found it” is awkward. | “leave the water better than you found it” |
| 15 | “basic, common, and rare resources” conflicts with the earlier capitalization of Basic Resources, Common Resources, and Rare Resources. | Capitalize consistently if these are formal categories. |
| 18 | “a crab looking animal” needs a compound-word hyphen. | “a crab-looking animal” |
| 18 | Pronoun inconsistency: “They can… It then… it’s target… They are…” | Use consistent singular pronouns: “It can… It then turns to face its target… It is slow…” |
| 21 | “hard or impossible to penetrate the hard outer shell” repeats “hard.” | “difficult or impossible to penetrate the outer shell” |
| 23 | “precision engineered plates” needs a hyphen. | “precision-engineered plates” |
| 23 | Sentence ends with two periods: “area..” | “area.” |
| 25 | “razor sharp mandibles” needs a hyphen. | “razor-sharp mandibles” |
| 25 | “re-tie and re-align” is inconsistent with standard closed compounds. | “retie and realign” |
| 26 | Missing comma: “light source their scales ignite…” | “light source, their scales ignite…” |
| 26 | “pitch black” needs a hyphen. | “pitch-black” |
| 28 | Comma splice: “Neither path is superior, they are…” | “Neither path is superior; they are…” |
| Dedication | “a twice done labor of love” needs hyphenation or rewording. | “a twice-done labor of love” or “a labor of love, done twice” |
| Dedication | “To my dog, who chased away many a Mucklurker and Bog Hag.” is a sentence fragment. | Connect it to the preceding dedication sentence or use semicolons. |
| Dedication | Missing space: “monsters,to” | “monsters, to” |
| Dedication | “those that bought this book” is less natural. | “those who bought this book” |
Broader Consistency Issues
- The manuscript alternates among angler, fisherman, and pioneer. Choose a preferred term and apply it consistently.
- It alternates among rod, pole, and fishing rod. Standardize these terms where they refer to the same item.
- Apply capitalization consistently to named skills and resource categories.