Proofreading findings

Spelling and grammar

Location	Issue	Suggested correction
Apple Pie Essence	“the drinkers legs and arms” is missing the possessive apostrophe.	“the drinker’s legs and arms”
Cherry Bourbon	“one time use” should be hyphenated when used as an adjective.	“one-time use”
Coala	“Heals drinker” omits the article.	“Heals the drinker”
Coala	The conditional repeats “drinker” without an article.	“the drinker drops to zero stamina and zero energy”
Dark Rum	“an impostor of themselves” is awkward and number agreement is unclear.	“believes everyone is an impostor of themself” (or specify the intended roleplay effect)
Dragon’s Strength	“Roll a d10 on drinking” is awkward.	“Roll a d10 when drinking.”
Dragon’s Strength	“gain use of the Strength condition” omits an article.	“Gains one use of the Strength condition for one task.”
Dwarven Cider	“Non dwarves” should be hyphenated.	“Non-dwarves”
Dwarven Cider	“will attempt to the best of their ability to do so” is cumbersome.	“will attempt to do so to the best of their ability”
Firebreath	“where ever” is misspelled.	“wherever”
Firebreath	“wherever they have struck killing blows” is incomplete/awkward.	“wherever they have struck killing blows against other creatures”
Maple Bourbon	“If failed by rolling a 7-10” is awkward.	“On a failed roll of 7–10”
Maple Bourbon	“body..” has two periods.	“body.”
Melon Shine	“moonshiner type character” needs a hyphen.	“moonshiner-type character”
Melon Shine	“condition..” has two periods.	“condition.”
Mountain Whisky	The semicolon in “trees for 5 minutes. They might be treants or evil trees; or evil treants!” is incorrect.	Use a comma or separate sentence: “They might be treants, evil trees, or evil treants!”
Orange Dreams	“Has the worst aftertaste…” is a sentence fragment.	“The drinker experiences the worst aftertaste imaginable.”
Orange Dreams	“in game” should be hyphenated.	“in-game”
Ouch	“Grant 5 temporary body” disagrees with the third-person style used elsewhere.	“Grants 5 temporary body.”
Peppermint Cream	“If drank” is incorrect usage.	“If drunk”
Peppermint Cream	“Immediately” is unnecessarily capitalized mid-sentence.	“immediately”
Pumpkin Pie Essence	“can not” should be one word.	“cannot”
Stone Brandy	“one time use” should be hyphenated.	“one-time use”
Southern Whisky Comfort	“Reduce rest/recovery/meditation” should use third-person agreement.	“Reduces rest/recovery/meditation”
Sweet Cherry	“5 minute heat” needs a hyphen.	“5-minute heat”
Sweet Cherry	“and“Poisoned”” is missing a space.	“and “Poisoned””
Witchshroom	“tham” is misspelled.	“than”
Witchshroom	“If done during a 24 hour period from first shot” is awkward and lacks articles/hyphenation.	“If consumed within 24 hours of the first shot”
Behold the Beholder	“An eye in a shot of brew of choice” is a sentence fragment.	“An eye is placed in a shot of the brew of your choice.”
Behold the Beholder	“Must eat eye” omits articles.	“Must eat the eye and finish the shot.”
Copperhead	“Up to2” is missing a space.	“Up to 2”
Flight among the stars	“can not” should be one word.	“cannot”
Pumpkin Pie (Cocktails)	“fear based” should be hyphenated.	“fear-based”
Sweet Roll	“Wears off if not used at the end of the hour” is awkward.	“It wears off if unused at the end of the hour.”
Umber Ogre	“One shot each…” is a sentence fragment.	“Contains one shot each of Blackheart Whisky, Cherry Bourbon, and Sweet Heat.”
Umber Ogre	“in game skills” should be hyphenated.	“in-game skills”
Umber Ogre	“no weapons proficiency” is awkward.	“no weapon proficiency”
Will o’ The Whisky	“and has an irresistible urge” has an unclear subject.	“The drinker sees a ball of light just out of reach and has an irresistible urge to follow it.”
Inkwell	“causing a decrease in rest 1d20 minutes per hour” is missing “by.”	“causing rest to decrease by 1d20 minutes per hour”
Inkwell	“Ex.” is an inconsistent abbreviation.	Use “e.g.,” or “For example,”
Bloodlite	“per bottle drank” is incorrect usage.	“per bottle drunk” (or “per bottle consumed”)
Beholder (Beer)	“per bottle drank” is incorrect usage.	“per bottle drunk” (or “per bottle consumed”)
Pickle Shot	“Instant refresh” is a sentence fragment.	“Instantly refreshes the drinker, restoring 5 body and 3 energy or 3 stamina.”

Inconsistencies and clarity issues

Location	Issue	Suggested correction
Throughout	Effect text alternates between “you,” “the drinker,” and “drinker.”	Choose one subject style, preferably “the drinker,” and apply it consistently.
Throughout	Frequency wording varies among “Twice per day,” “Two times per day,” “Up to 2 per day,” and “2 times per day.”	Standardize to one format, such as “Up to 2 times per day.”
Throughout	“per day,” “per weekend,” and “per event” sometimes lack final punctuation.	Add periods consistently.
Throughout	“d10,” “1d10,” conditions, skills, and calls use inconsistent capitalization and quotation marks.	Match the game’s official terminology and standardize quotation-mark style.
Peppermint Cream	The effect requires a third shot, but the limit says “Up to 2 per day,” making the effect impossible to trigger if the limit applies to this drink.	Confirm whether the limit should be “Up to 3 per day” or whether the effect/limit is intended differently.
Sweet Cherry	“Cure for “Hex” and “Poisoned”” does not specify whether both conditions are cured.	Use “Cures the Hex and Poisoned conditions.” if both are intended.
Witchshroom	“see Ruby” references an item/entry not present in this document.	Confirm that Ruby is defined elsewhere; otherwise add the missing rule or replace the reference.
Pumpkin Pie (Cocktails)	Its frequency line uses a round bullet (`•`) while the rest use square bullets (`▪`).	Replace it with the document’s standard bullet.
Pickle Shot	The final bullet is empty.	Remove the empty bullet.
Lemon Shot	“5 per day” does not state whether this means five shots or five uses.	Use “Up to 5 shots per day” (if that is intended).
Sweet Cherry / Peppermint Cream / Pumpkin Pie	Condition names and calls vary in capitalization and quotation style.	Use the exact standardized condition/call names throughout, e.g. “Fear” and “Resist.”
Titles	“Of The Earth” and “Will o’ The Whisky” use title capitalization inconsistently with normal title style.	Confirm the official names; otherwise use “Of the Earth” and “Will o’ the Whisky.”